Alys Story

wings42992 · Posted: Tue Aug 30, 2005 7:14 pm Post subject: Alys Story

ok this story probubly sucks but im bored so whatever

Chapter 1

Hi my name is Aly, I'm 14,I have light brown hair and light green eyes.oh yeah my wings, there white with yellow tips. I was created by scientist mostly called whitecoats. I grew up in a place called The School where the whitecoats graft animal DNA into human babys and run tests and do a sorts of stuff to them but very few of them survive. I am one of the expeiments who did survive, some of the others are called Erasers they look mostly human but they can change into wolf like creatures at will. I escaped 2 years ago with 3 other kids my age there names are Alex,Trix,and Rosie. Alex is 14 and just younger than me he has Black hair dark green eyes and light brown wings. Trix is 9 she has blonde hair, blue eyes, and white wings. Rosie is the baby of the group at 6, she has dirty blonde hair, eyes that are so blue they look purple, her wings are a strawberry blonde color. we were all sitting in the cave that had been our
home for a year. when we heard a noise it wasent that loud but the white coats had enhanced our hearing so much that we could hear a pin drop.
then we saw 6 kids come around the corner they were just like us they had wings!

Mr.Man · Posted: Tue Aug 30, 2005 7:19 pm Post subject:

Has potental. Stop now and it will have none. So proced to make it all it can be. I will be waiting for more.

-Mr.Man
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wings42992 · Posted: Tue Aug 30, 2005 7:23 pm Post subject:

ill try to keep it goin but i suck at writting!

arya ride · Tested & Nested Joined: 12 Jul 2005 Posts: 1021

oh, hehe. rosie would kill ya if she saw that. Very Happy

like mr. man said-it has potential if you keep going
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wings42992 · Posted: Thu Sep 01, 2005 4:00 pm Post subject:

I told her i was useing her name i was on the phone with her when i was typing And she acttually like it but i did ask her if i could use her name of course i probubly would have anyway Very Happy

arya ride · Tested & Nested Joined: 12 Jul 2005 Posts: 1021

oh, hehe.
well i don't really care, so write more story
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countryangel · Posted: Fri Sep 02, 2005 5:40 pm Post subject:

i like it. keep going

wings42992 · Posted: Mon Sep 05, 2005 5:16 pm Post subject:

okay ill write more
Chapter 2
um... Hi i said a little shoked to see them i reconized them as some of the kids from The School. "Hi im max" said the oldest girl than the little girl who looked about 6 said "hey i reconze you from the school! your Aly arent you"
"yes i am i reconize you too your angel."
that night we were sitting around the fire talking and eating when the Erasers came angel and rosie both screamed and we all jumped to our feet. one Eraser looked at Max and said
"Hi max did miss me?" "No not really" she said and she kicked him in the face and we were all fighting, next thing i knew everything was black. when i woke up i looked around to see that every body elce was waking up. i looked around to see if rosie was alright and i relized rosie and angel were gone. the Erasers Had taken them!!!!!

there this chapter is probubly worse than th first one but oh well.
by the way arya i was on a youth group retreat this weekend and rosie was there and she said she tried to get the book out of the library and it was out so she still hasent read it!!!

BeCcY,mWa · Posted: Sun Sep 11, 2005 7:38 am Post subject:

Hey I like it, maybe if you expanded it a bit more, made it a little longer.
But the storyline so-far is great! Keep it up!
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arya ride · Tested & Nested Joined: 12 Jul 2005 Posts: 1021

i agree with BeCcY ^^

when you gonna write more?
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wings42992 · Posted: Sun Sep 25, 2005 5:31 pm Post subject:

I dont know when im gunna write more by the way i just figured out what your screen name is from!!

arya ride · Tested & Nested Joined: 12 Jul 2005 Posts: 1021

aaalllrighty then...
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