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Excellent! I love to see us altogether as a flock! |
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Yeah, Real good idea. Keep it up! |
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Good Idea I guess. Need some working on though. |
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I guess... |
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Umm... *cough*bad*cough* |
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BeCcY,mWa Tested & Nested
Joined: 07 Jul 2005 Posts: 4791 Location: Yes Please
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Posted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 2:40 am Post subject: We Are The Flock (Everyone's a character!!!) |
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Hey, I've decided to write this fanfic where pretty much everyone on this site is in it.
For some of the pplz names I've had to shorten them
Eg. jemofgod - jem
snuggles - snug
Angel of Death - AoD
Fallen_angel - Fallen
BeCcY,mWa - Bec
Pitifulbutme - Pitiful
etcetera.
I hope its okay!
Enjoy!
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Prologue
Bec’s Point of View
The erasers led me back to my cage. My training session went overtime, it was really dark now and I could just see the shiny cage bars that passed me by as I walked back to my own prison cell. Well, that’s what I thought it was. I reached out my hand and touched the bars, they tickled my hand as they passed me, I watched the names on the cages go by as well: Kite, UR, Rick, Country, Azurai, Jem, Rain, Windy, Leaf, Kylee….
Then it came up to my cage, it said: Bec.
“Get in!” The eraser shoved me into my hell box and locked the door.
“Ow.” I felt my nose bash up against the back of my cage. I touched it, it was okay, but it hurt real bad.
“Bec, you back?” Snug’s voice called from above me. I was in the bottom row of cages, Snug’s cage was in the row on top of mine.
There was almost a hundred of us, all bird kids with wings, stuck in metal cages and being tested on everyday in a sick lab we called, ‘the school’.
We were mutants, and proud to be them.
“Yeah, I’m back alright.” I rubbed my nose,
“We were getting kinda worried, you know Bec.” A voice came from the back f my cage.
“AoD? Is that you?” I could recognise her voice anywhere,
“Yeah, tis me.”
“Training went overtime, gosh I’m so exhausted. I bet you one day I’m gonna black out on them!”
There was murmuring for a few seconds.
“I’m tired.” I spoke up, everyone hushed down a notch.
“Ofcourse you are,” Pitiful stuck her fingers through the bars and made me jump, she was in the cage to my left.
“Yeah. Come on lets sleep.” Kylee who was in a cage to my right, told us.
There was silence and I slumped back in my prison cell, wondering what the day will bring me tomorrow.
“Ah! Gosh, what the-!” I woke with a start, the lights had been turned on.
Then I realised that that was the daily ritual the erasers carried out to wake us up.
“Free day off.” The eraser walked along the cages with a clip board,
“Free day off.”
“Treadmill.” …
I whispered to Kylee, “I hope I get a free day off!”
The eraser got closer, “Bike.”
And closer, “Free day off.”
He got to Kylee, “Treadmill.”
I heard Kylee sigh and saw her furrow her brow.
“Free day off.” The eraser told me, I looked to Kylee. She gave me a funny kind of disappointed look and was grabbed from her cage by a pair of hairy hands. She was pushed away out of the room along with quite a few other winged experiments. I recognise some of them: Rain, Jem, UR, Kite, Azurai, Toaster, Misty, Ranna, Arya, Leo, Ace, Windy, and a few others.
I stared around the room. There were huge blobs of empty cages and speckles of cages with a bird experiment in them.
I looked into Kylee’s empty cage.
“Leafy!” I never knew the Leaf’s cage was two away from mine, but now I knew that Leaf was on the other side of Kylee’s cage.
“Heyo Becbec!” She smiled and grabbed the bars of her cage. She had opened her wings slightly.
They were a creamy-beige colour. Very pretty.
“You look, - a little sad…” I told her, she sent me a slightly sad look,
“Rain’s out training and so is Jem, and Windy. Even Kylee’s gone so there’s no one in the cages around me to talk to…” She added, “Apart from you, but you’re still so far away from me.”
I peered at the cages around her, to Leaf’s right was a cage marked ‘Jem’, above her, a cage marked ‘Rain’ and I supposed that the cage behind her was Windy’s for I could not see the name.
“Aww, Leafy!” I pushed my fingers through the bars of my cage, and she pushed hers through too. There was no way we were going to reach, but I just wanted to let her know that I’m not that far away from her.
“Be-e-c-c-y~y~y!” Pitiful whined from my left,
“Aha. What’s up now?” I asked as I turned to face her, her cheek was pushed up against the cage, and she was gazing up at me.
“I’m bored.” She perked upright,
“I think we all are.” Snug scoffed, “I wish we got to train with guns and flamethrowers so we could zap and shoot people and then we’d know how to scorch them until they squirm and -”
“Calm down Snug! I bet we all wished we had guns and flamethrowers.” AoD cut her off.
I giggled.
“What?!” Snug and AoD peered at me.
I coughed and straightened up, “Umm, nothing.”
“AHH!”
The door burst open with a loud ‘Bang!’ _________________ It's a bird, it's a plane...No, it's Beccy>.<I am a shiny foil bok!
Kylee is my online big sister!!!
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jemofgod Tested & Nested
Joined: 25 Apr 2005 Posts: 16634 Location: at the foot of the cross
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Posted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 3:09 am Post subject: |
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OMG! That is so cool. You must keep going! _________________ "Don't mess with the Jess." ~jb0y read life as me in the fan fic's
Club Mommy and MEG (most excellent gem)
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BeCcY,mWa Tested & Nested
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Posted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 3:15 am Post subject: |
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Thankyou Jem! *Huggles* I'm so happy that you like it! _________________ It's a bird, it's a plane...No, it's Beccy>.<I am a shiny foil bok!
Kylee is my online big sister!!!
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jemofgod Tested & Nested
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Posted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 3:19 am Post subject: |
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You ish very talented Becbec. I love that you are using us in the story. Way cool. _________________ "Don't mess with the Jess." ~jb0y read life as me in the fan fic's
Club Mommy and MEG (most excellent gem)
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BeCcY,mWa Tested & Nested
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Posted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 3:27 am Post subject: |
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Aww tankoo jemjem! It's just that people here are so nice that they deserve to be in a story. All of us together! We are our own flock. _________________ It's a bird, it's a plane...No, it's Beccy>.<I am a shiny foil bok!
Kylee is my online big sister!!!
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BeCcY,mWa Tested & Nested
Joined: 07 Jul 2005 Posts: 4791 Location: Yes Please
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Posted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 4:19 am Post subject: |
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I hope I am not posting too fast.
Here is the next chappi:
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Chapter 1
Kite’s Point of View
Great.
So while I’m strapped onto a treadmill with nowhere to go but forwards, the majority of the rest of us (The mutant bird kids) are having a free day off!
Sometimes I really doubt if these ‘erasers’ and ‘whitecoats’ have feelings, or even if they have souls.
How long will they make me run on this wretched treadmill? Hours probably, I wouldn’t be surprised if they made me run the whole day.
“Let’s take a blood test.” A female whitecoat pulled out a needle and jabbed it into me.
I squirmed a little, it actually stung! The other whitecoats held me still while she freely pulled some of my blood out.
“Thankyou Kite.” The whitecoat grinned evilly, ever since they’d started using our real names, I’ve grown to regret it. Well I guess it’s better than “Experiment 6hytxx92”. - That was my old number.
I scowled at her.
Then they pushed me off into another room where they started doing other tests like blood pressure and heart beat.
These people were obsessed freaks. You know what I mean?!
“Okay Kite. Let’s get you onto the treadmill. Going for a nice jog to start off with hey?” The female whitecoat was back.
I scowled harder.
They plugged a heart-rate monitor up to me and they shoved me onto the treadmill. There was an eraser just behind me who held a shiny long stick.
“Want to test the toy out first?” he chuckled as he zapped me with the shiny stick, I had seen this stick before. Many times before. The zaps burnt like mad, and the longer the zap the more painful the after-burn is.
I sighed in pain then broke into a jog, the treadmill got faster.
How long will I have to go on like this?
This place was a danger zone, a prison.
No, who am I kidding?
This place was hell on earth.
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Please do tell me what you think Is it okay so far? _________________ It's a bird, it's a plane...No, it's Beccy>.<I am a shiny foil bok!
Kylee is my online big sister!!!
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jemofgod Tested & Nested
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Posted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 5:44 am Post subject: |
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Kite is going to like that. _________________ "Don't mess with the Jess." ~jb0y read life as me in the fan fic's
Club Mommy and MEG (most excellent gem)
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BeCcY,mWa Tested & Nested
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Posted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 6:09 am Post subject: |
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Thanks jemjem... But not many people seem to like this story though _________________ It's a bird, it's a plane...No, it's Beccy>.<I am a shiny foil bok!
Kylee is my online big sister!!!
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~Fang_Rocks~ Tested & Nested
Joined: 05 Sep 2005 Posts: 915 Location: gone back in time to medievil japan to irritatae inuyasha. ( i wish )
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Posted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 6:24 am Post subject: |
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i like it it's really good.
keep up. _________________ My RP Characters ... 1st pic = ~Kami~ And 2nd pic = ~Rin~
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BeCcY,mWa Tested & Nested
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Posted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 6:29 am Post subject: |
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Tankoo!
Becbec will put you into an upcoming chappi she will!
I will call you Fangrock!! Thats a cute name! _________________ It's a bird, it's a plane...No, it's Beccy>.<I am a shiny foil bok!
Kylee is my online big sister!!!
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~Fang_Rocks~ Tested & Nested
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Posted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 6:33 am Post subject: |
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awwww, cool thanks _________________ My RP Characters ... 1st pic = ~Kami~ And 2nd pic = ~Rin~
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AngelGoneMad Leader of a Flock
Joined: 02 Sep 2005 Posts: 289 Location: Scotland
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Posted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 6:47 am Post subject: |
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Yeah this fan fic sounds good...it's a real good idea that you are including everyone in the sight..maybe you could continue it on RP and then everyone that wants to can join in...just a suggestion but then again you might get confused with the RP and the actual fan fic so maybe it isn't such a good idea!!! |
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countryangel Tested & Nested
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Posted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 6:50 am Post subject: |
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bec, this is GREAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! cant wait for more |
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WingedProtector Tested & Nested
Joined: 12 Jun 2005 Posts: 5006 Location: Sailing for the horizon...with Cpt. Jack Sparrow at my side XD
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Posted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 6:52 am Post subject: |
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Oooooh....me likey this!!!! Continue, please!!!! _________________
Hermione&Ron SQUEE! ^.^ |
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BeCcY,mWa Tested & Nested
Joined: 07 Jul 2005 Posts: 4791 Location: Yes Please
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Posted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 7:05 am Post subject: |
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Thanks, I'm writing the next part now.
*Huggle glomps everyone* _________________ It's a bird, it's a plane...No, it's Beccy>.<I am a shiny foil bok!
Kylee is my online big sister!!!
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